Which sentence makes the text easier to read?

Decide which of the alternative sentences is better in each case by writing "Better" in front of the one you prefer and "Worse" in front of the one you would like to take out. (Hint: Read about given and new information in sentences.)

Smoking is very harmful to health. It causes around 80 per cent of deaths from lung cancer bronchitis and emphysema in the UK. /   Around 80 per cent of deaths from lung cancer bronchitis and emphysema in the UK are caused by it. Heart disease can also be caused by smoking. /   Smoking can also lead to heart disease.

Tobacco smoke contains many harmful substances. These include tar, nicotine, and carbon monoxide.  / Tar, nicotine and carbon monoxide are among them.
Nicotine is addictive. Smokers want more cigarettes because of it. /  It causes a smoker to want more cigarettes. Nicotine also increases the heart rate and blood pressure, and makes blood vessels narrower than normal. This can lead to heart disease.
Carbon monoxide is a gas that takes the place of oxygen in red blood cells. The amount of oxygen the blood can carry is thereby reduced. /  This reduces the amount of oxygen that the blood can carry.

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